Children of the Sea: Feedback + Progress

    Our adaptation on Children of the Sea went well mostly, we finished the script and decided our settings. The only problem that is bothering us is our movements to make our performance more emotional and active, which is reflected from my peers' feedback. Because our performance made it close like having our own monologues while we're seperated on our journey escaping to South Korea, and also how we're expressing of feelings through letters writting; It is important how we should add more body motions to show some interaction, connection and interesting part to continue attracting the audience. However, in my opinion one of the problem that made our performance confusing today was because of the props not being prepared yet. We will be using lighting showing how we're in different areas, flags showing which country we're at, and paper, pen to show that we're writing down letters to each other. Also, James will be acting dead in his last monologue then when the spotlight comes on me, there will be a South Korea flag in the back showing that I have arrived there without meeting my husband.
       For body movement and tone, I think we should definitely improve our tone and voice to express our feelings more while reading the lines. We would have to discuss and highlight which part would we like to emphasize, show sadness, show anger or show ourselves being tired because of the journey. Also, more interactions should be added in the first scene since it is the only scene where the lover is being together in front of the audience, and to make the latter on situation logical, it is important to show this married couple in love more obvious. Even though we're simply reading our our letters, I am think that we could add some actions in between us writing down letters to show that we're actually escaping in a harsh situation. For example running into the stage and breathe rapidly to show that I was just running away from the soldiers or from danger.
          Since many of our classmates said that our plot is unclear, so I am thinking that we could add in a narrator's voice to tell some presupposition to show where we are and in case some people doesn't recognize North Korea's flag or Kim-Jung Un's picture poster we will be sticking on the wall while performing. We could also add lines in the first scene like :"I will see you in South Korea, be safe." or "Be safe in the sea, I will definitely escape succesfully as well in the woods to meet you and our daughter in South Korea", to show the audience what is our plan and what will be happening in the upcoming scenes.
           Overall, me and my partner will be fixing our script to make it clear and preparing our props for the next performance. Also, discussing where and what emotions should we show together to the audience according to the text. We could build up the emotion as the story slowly steps to the end, and even a nervous feeling using red lights and talking with speed while reading one of the letters.