Saturday, December 17, 2016

3rd Draft Essay (I couldn't upload and send it the school email using Words document)

Marinda Hsu
IB Literature & Performance
Ms. Guarino
2016.12.15

        Romeo and Juliet, one of the most well-known play written by William Shakespeare is a romance but a tragedy between this two star-crossed lovers. As tragedy gradually started happening after Juliet meeting Romeo, her love.; Act 4 Scene 1 was one of the most emotional parts she have appeared in the play. However, me playing Friar Laurence as a guidance and an important elder in the play, is who Juliet asked for help in this specific scene where she felt anger and helpless as her starting line of the scene proved when she yells “O Shut the door!” as an expression. Me and my partner have chose this scene because of its obvious demonstration of both Juliet’s change on personality and Friar Laurence’s reliable characteristic. Juliet’s choice without hesitation to ask help from Friar Laurence have proved his credibility and justice impression being planted deeply in front of everyone. In addition, the decisions being made in this scene--- to take the vial, have indirectly lead to the ending of the story, which makes it more important. It is also a plot twist where their secret love is gradually turning into a bigger issue that soon will be known by the public. Acting Friar Laurence tranquilly with steady body movement allows me to analyze deeper into his caring, earnest characteristic and understand his trusting relationship with Juliet.
        The theme and emotion within Act 4 Scene 1 is mostly agitated caused by an explosion of the conflict where Juliet is forced to marry County Paris; Therefore, this process of pondering an important solution in order to fix this situation for Juliet, went fast. Since Juliet was being emotional and trying to suicide with a dagger, Friar Laurence’s purpose during that time was to comfort and calm her down as soon as possible by giving her a satisfying solution for this went-wrong marriage. A repetition of the word “hold” in Friar Laurence’s lines show how he was trying to cease Juliet’s intemperate anger shown by her fast speed and high tone while speaking to me as an elder. Lines like “As that is desperate which we would prevent” is a sign of their close relationship and a part where Friar Laurence started showing his reliable and caring characteristic for Juliet who was helpless. Because it is Juliet who was being “desperate”, but Friar Laurence said “we” showing how he was willing to share this sadness and help her without hesitation in this harsh situation. This also emerges Friar Laurence’s kindness and righteous, how he was willing to stand on two teenagers’ side with no care of the hattress between the Capulets and the Montagues family.
        On top of how William Shakespeare uses a great amount of foreshadowing in his opuses, for example Hamlet’s gloomy starting scene to correspond to its story of revenge. Same in Romeo and Juliet, Allusion and metaphor of death started appearing within lines in this specific scene--- “Then is it likely thou wilt undertake a think like death” and “The roses in thy lips and cheeks shall fade” to correspond with the tragedy ending of both Romeo and Juliet’s death.
        One of Friar Laurence’s line says, “If rather than to marry Pairs, thou hast the strength of will to sly thyself” is an analogy between both unwilling events that they would not hope to happen. It shows how they viewed marrying Paris just as serious and bad as to a level for Juliet to suicide. Other than analogy, symbolism is also shown in this scene that corresponds to the previous balcony scene where Romeo and Juliet says goodbye using symbolism of a nightingale and a bridegroom. This line in our scene “Now when the bridegroom in the morning comes to rouse thee from thy bed” symbolizes a rise of hope for Juliet; Besides the symbolism of bridegroom, how people have always considered morning as a brand new start, so do this quote symbolizes how if this solution works out, it would be another new start for Juliet and Romeo.
        For our staging, we decided to dress Friar Laurence---me, with a robe and a cross necklace to directly show the audience who I am acting. Other than the costume, we prepared a small bottle of ink as the poison that appears later in the plot. During our performance, I have decided to emphasize important lines by raising my voice louder and higher. For example I have emphasized the line “Thou shalt continue two and forty hours” by raising my voice after many lines being told to Juliet previously; the purpose is to make sure that Juliet is listening carefully on the efficacy of the vial. Another part I choose to emphasize by speaking clearly, loudly, and slowly, is within my last part of the scene:”Hold, Get you gone, Be strong and prosperous”, This is like a spiritual catchphrase from Friar Laurence to Juliet before he lets her go. Before I emphasizes this line, Juliet was yelling “Give me, give me! O tell me not of fear!”, this shows how she wasn’t thinking rationally. Therefore, me emphasizing the repetition word “hold”, with my hands holding on to Juliet’s shaking arm help show how I wanted to calm her down and be reasonable on whatever she have decided to do. The phrase “Be strong and prosperous” also sounded like a warning and a concern as well.
        On the other hand, I specifically interpret this line “And, if thou darest, I’ll give thee remedy” as a hesitation, which I showed in my performance by pausing between each one or two words following the coma. With this, I am hoping to show the audience friar Laurence’s concern for Juliet. Moreover, I have decided to change my tone and the atmosphere in the middle of our scene. Even though the overall atmosphere in this scene in intense and depressing, some changes will keep the audience interested and the performance more vivid, instead of speaking and acting in the same tone. Therefore, during this line “Now, When the bridegroom in the morning comes”, I choose to raise my voice and wave my arms alike a sun rising up; In order to keep the audience concentrated and to show the significance of this symbolism being mentioned previously, where it symbolizes hope in this scene where Juliet could be one more step closer to her love if everything went smoothly.
        Additionally, to better portray my characters. I decided to use methods from Michael Chekhov’s lessons on acting. First of all, I imagine myself as a father-like character facing an immature young girl having a bad temper asking me for help. Constantly asking myself what do I want as Friar Laurence? How will a reliable adult react while facing a teenager trying to suicide because of her temporary extreme emotions?, then answer them while I perform by patting Juliet on the back to show comfort and hugging her to show that everything will be fine, that someone is helping her out. Second of all, I try to act in the way Michael Chekhov have taught in his lessons, to feel a power starting in my chest and spreading it into every part of my body, starting with smaller body movements then expanding them into bigger movements.
        In conclusion as an actor acting for the very first time, memorizing the lines and acting naturally with emotion has been a challenge for me. Especially acting an opposite gender made it more difficult to seem real. In my opinions, what I have done well in the performance were the small details on acting. For example hiding the dagger secretly Juliet used as a threat of suicide to prevent danger, keeping my pace slow while talking to show my calmness, walking steadily even though Juliet was knocking hard on the door or yelling, all of these are what I did to show Friar Laurence’s personality naturally and indirectly to the audience. What I could improve on, will definitely be my facial expression and eye contact. While memorizing my lines and staging body movements, I have forgotten that facial expression could have been a key point to show many inner expressions. It is also important to switch my eye contact between the audience and to Juliet to make sure that we really are in a conversation but in the mean time let the audience feel like that they are a part of the scene.
Overall, Act 4 Scene 1 revealing Friar Laurence’s characteristics have brought me into a deeper look of his trusting relationship with Juliet and how I have gained experience on performing a man with authority by blockings through high and low level while standing, and through his steady, straight body movements through most of the performance in order to fit his image as a reliable friar.

        

Wednesday, December 14, 2016

Kirk Krak children of the sea Notes

Kirk krak
"Children of the sea"
-a man's letter to his lover 
-he's on a boat recollecting his memories of his childhood and his lover 
-he believed that "soldiers are not human"
-people are sick on the boat

-female writer is in Haiti with war going on 
-her son is dead 
-raised in a well guarded house 
-in Haiti, they said their old president is returning but then it was a lie people went to the airport for it were shot my military. 
-the girl is in a higher social level than the boy. 
-if someone wanted to tell a story they say "Kirk" and if the audiences are willing to listen to it, they say "krak"


Tuesday, December 6, 2016

Second draft of essay

Paragraph separation and rearrange for final draft ideas:

Para1: significance of this scene(why choose this scene? Why important?) thesis statement. Include author and play title.

Para2: Literary Features
(emotion: agitated, anger, sad
 Relationship: trust, relying, give evidence of friar being calm and persuading
Purpose: Friar’s purposes to calm Juliet, give quote
Theme and Conflict: a process of creating important solution leading to the result of the ending; problems exploded)

Para 3: Literary Features
 (Word choice and its repetition: Hold..etc
Foreshadowing, allusion: find quote connecting to death
analogy: “If rather to marry Paris….”quote, both unwilling events to be happened
symbolism: bridegroom and morning as hopeme
metaphor: whole section on process of death”there art thou dead”
plot twist: of secret love gradually turning into big issue to public)

Para 4: Theoretical analysis
Staging: mention props’ setting in black box’s stage, whats in the center
Voice, projection: When it is low, When it is loud
Emphasizes: important words to calm Juliet and key lines
Blocking: high level and low level showing authority and emotion
Pacing: Friar Luarence’s slow pace
Eye Contact/ facial expression: between me and my partner. Longer conversation- to the audience

Para 5: 
Interaction: patting on back etc. show close relationship and trying to comfort.
Given circumstances: what have happened before Juliet stepped in.
Motivation: What do I want as Friaràcomfort her with a solutionà soon came up with idea but show not sure of it (give evidence of hesitation)

Para 6:
reflection overall
Obstacles: memorization, showing authority, act like a male
Rehearsal: activities we’ve done (find in blog for remind)

Para 7:
Conclusion: conclude both reflection and analyze keypoints. 






Sentences or paragraphs left after eliminating less meaningful parts originally wrote. To rearrange for final draft easier
(because the I got a 1 for section A and 2 for C, So I think it is better to just rewrite most of it so does not confuse myself and mix up different themes of literary or theoretical):

Romeo and Juliet as one of the most well known work of William Shakespeare, is a love story but also a tragedy.

The scene started with Juliet shouting”O Shut the door!....past hope, past cure, past help!.”, this shows how Juliet came right into the scene with indignant and impulse. Friar Laurence starting his first line after Juliet with “I already know thy grief” shows his sympathy and attentive.

Thesis Statement: Acting friar Laurence tranquilly with steady body movement allows me to analyze deeper into his caring ,earnest characteristic and understand his trusting relationship with Juliet. 
           
we have decided to choose this specific scene because of its importance towards both characters and the plot. This reveals how Juliet chose to trust another adult instead of her parents and how Juliet became an emotional girl.

Juliet’s choice without hesitate to ask help from friar Laurence have proved his credibility and justice impression being planted deeply in front of everyone.
This scene especially emerges his kindness and righteous, how he was willing to stand on two teenagers’ side with no care of the hatress between the Capulets and the Montagues. He showed patient while listening to Juliet speaking and was also brave enough to suggest such risking resolution for Juliet. Friar Laurence as a god father seemed not as conservative and traditional, by excogitating such intense and dangerous plan for the couple. This might also be a reason why Romeo as an adolescent boy has a unordinary close relationship since the beginning of the story. 
            While staging, we decided to dress friar Laurence---me, with a robe and a cross necklace to directly show the audience who I am acting. Other than costumes, we prepared a small bottle of dark color ink as the poison that appear later in the plot.

 On the other hand, to better portray our characters. We decided to use methods from Michael Chekhov’s lessons. First of all, I imagine myself as a father-like character facing an immature young girl having a bad temper asking me for help. How will a reliable adult react while facing a teenager trying to suicide because of her extreme emotion? Is a question I have asked myself before acting. Second of all, I try to act like how Michael Chekhov have taught in his lessons, to feel a power starting in my chest and spreading it into every part of my body, starting with smaller body movements then expand movements bigger.

            Specifically, I interpret this line from Friar Laurence “And, if thou darest, I'll give thee remedy” as a hesitation, which I showed in my performance by pausing between each one or two words following the coma. With this, I am hoping to show the audience that questions this solution because of it might be a clue of friar being irresponsible and also impulse as an adult to give to a young, emotional girl needing help a vial like this. Since Juliet was being emotional, he would have to come up with a quick solution to comfort her.


These pause eventually tells how he respects Juliet’s opinion and decision to choose what to do, take the vial or not. Moreover, to show a worried adult.

 I emphasizes the line “Thou shalt continue two and forty hours” by raising my voice after many lines being told to Juliet previously; the purpose is to make sure Juliet is listening carefully on the efficacy of the vial in case accidents occur. 
           
 I have decided to change my tone and the atmosphere in the middle of our scene. Even though the overall atmosphere in this scene is intense and depressing, some change will keep the audience interested and the performance more vivid instead of speaking and acting in the same tone. Therefore, during this line “Now, when the bridegroom in the morning comes”, I choose to raise my voice and wave my arms as the sun rising up. In order to keep audience concentrated and to show the significance of the bridegroom symbolizing hope in the scene where Juliet will be one more step closer to her love if everything went smoothly.

 Another part I choose to emphasize by speaking clearly, loudly and slowly, is within my last part of the scene: ”Hold, Get you gone, Be strong and prosperous”, This is like a spiritual catchphrase from Friar Laurence to Juliet before he lets her go. Before me saying this line, Juliet was yelling “Give me, give me! O tell me not of fear!”, this showed how she wasn’t thinking rationally. Therefore, me emphasizing “Hold”, with my hands holding on to Juliet’s shaking arm help showing how I wanted to calm her down and be reasonable on whatever she have decided to do. “Be strong and prosperous” sounded like a warning and a concern as well.
            As an actor acting for the very first time, memorizing the lines and acting naturally with emotion have been a challenge for me, especially acting a man made me as a girl more difficult to show the reliability and authority power of friar Laurence. However, what I have done well in the performance are the small details on acting. For example, continually patting Juliet on her back to show comfort as she spits out her anger. Also I choose to hide the dagger carefully as Juliet have handed it to me after an urge of suicide. In case of her emotions driving up her intention to suicide again, I was looking for a good place to hide the dagger where she would not see. Continually, I have also been trying to calm her down through the conversation by asking her to seat down. I stood straight to on imagery show Friar Laurence justice and authority. 

Saturday, December 3, 2016

Grading Sample Papers with IB Rubric

Sample 1
Analysis of the literary features of the text:
3.
Even though the author provides a long direct quote from the scene. But it made it too general. Even with the paragraph under the quote. His description is also too vague and broad.
Exploration of the chosen approach to the text:
7.
He describes how he and his partner acts on stage with some specific change in tone or body movements, But should tell more of a why, analysis to tell the reason he chooses to use this specific way of acting and where does this analysis come from in the text.
Use of language, structure:
3.
Even though paragraphs are being separated well between the first few part on analysis of literary features and use of language. But the last few paragraphs have became a combination of different elements and theme of his performance. The ending sentence is not a good and deep sentence for a long essay to be ending with, it sounded too muddle.


Sample 2
Analysis of the literary features of the text:
4.
Because the author describes and explains analysis with direct quotes supporting her statements. But it only took her a short paragraph on doing this. More of her writings are on the next category, how she chooses to act the scene.

Exploration of the chosen approach to the text:
9.
Because the author wrote a lot of her decisions on acting with detailed descriptions to fit her analysis on specific lines in the scene. For example how she tried trembling her voice and hand when Ophelia felt fear. She also gave the line (directly) to show which part she have interpret this specific feeling of the character.

Use of language, structure:
3.
The organization of this writing is being separated into different paragraphs but I don’t really think it is being separated for any purpose. Because most of it are about staging analysiss. And some of the paragraphs does not have a good ending sentence nor does a starting sentence to tell what the next parargraph will be about.