Grading Sample Papers with IB Rubric

Sample 1

Analysis of the literary features of the text:

3.

Even though the author provides a long direct quote from the scene. But it made it too general. Even with the paragraph under the quote. His description is also too vague and broad.

Exploration of the chosen approach to the text:

7.

He describes how he and his partner acts on stage with some specific change in tone or body movements, But should tell more of a why, analysis to tell the reason he chooses to use this specific way of acting and where does this analysis come from in the text.

Use of language, structure:

3.

Even though paragraphs are being separated well between the first few part on analysis of literary features and use of language. But the last few paragraphs have became a combination of different elements and theme of his performance. The ending sentence is not a good and deep sentence for a long essay to be ending with, it sounded too muddle.

Sample 2

Analysis of the literary features of the text:

4.

Because the author describes and explains analysis with direct quotes supporting her statements. But it only took her a short paragraph on doing this. More of her writings are on the next category, how she chooses to act the scene.

Exploration of the chosen approach to the text:

9.

Because the author wrote a lot of her decisions on acting with detailed descriptions to fit her analysis on specific lines in the scene. For example how she tried trembling her voice and hand when Ophelia felt fear. She also gave the line (directly) to show which part she have interpret this specific feeling of the character.

Use of language, structure:

3.

The organization of this writing is being separated into different paragraphs but I don’t really think it is being separated for any purpose. Because most of it are about staging analysiss. And some of the paragraphs does not have a good ending sentence nor does a starting sentence to tell what the next parargraph will be about.